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21 November 2008 @ 09:50 am
(Fic) Whitman: A Woman Waits for Me 1/39  

Title: A Woman Waits for Me
Chapter: 1/39
Author: ladygray99
Pairing: Charlie/Colby
Summary: When Don’s life slides into the darkness only family will help him find his way out.
Rating: This part PG-13 overall NC-17
Word Count: 3,567 (119,209 Total. God I wish I was kidding)
Warning: Discussion of Rape and Suicide
Disclaimer: Numb3rs belongs to other people who are not me. I’m not making any money from this though I wish I were.
Previous Chapters: Part 4 of Whitman ‘verse.
Authors Notes: Hello all. Here it is the long awaited fourth part to Whitman ‘verse. I’ll tell you right now if you haven’t read the rest of the Whitman stories this will make very little sense so go here and start reading. It’s OK. I’ll wait. This starts out maybe nine months after Sing My Body Electric. This is going to be a little different as it will cover about two years of time so there will be jumps of months between parts. I also want to apologize. While there is sex in this there isn’t a lot, considering the length, and half of it will be het. While Colby and Charlie do feature largely this is mainly a Don story or really a Don and Charlie relationship as brothers’ story. This is also the middle part of a trilogy (yes Whitman 5 is in the works) and while I’ll try to tie up a lot of the threads by the end a few will be left hanging. I’m going to say this is cannon up through Trust Metric. Let’s say Trust Metric happened sometime in the middle of The Modern Man I Sing. I’ll put warnings and ratings and pairing on each part as we go. I spent almost a year of my life on this monster so feedback is really desperately wanted.
Betas: The amazing swingandswirl   and riverotter1951


A Woman Waits for Me

A WOMAN waits for me—she contains all, nothing is lacking,
Yet all were lacking, if sex were lacking, or if the moisture of the right man were lacking.
A Woman Waits for Me, Leaves of Grass, Walt Whitman

Part 1
The Taste of Gunoil

Don felt himself drift in the comfortable buzz brought on by three beers, the easy laughter of his team, and the knowledge of a job well done. His Dad had already climbed off to bed, leaving the ‘kids’ to sit around and talk.

“Hey, Megan?” David asked. “Does having this conversation count as sexual harassment?” The conversation had gone from first bust, to first kiss, to lurid, embarrassing tales of losing one’s virginity.

Megan took a pull of her own beer. “I don’t know, David, are you feeling harassed?”

“Careful.” Colby said. “Don’t forget she’s an undercover shrink. Anything you say is open for analysis.”

Megan tossed a wadded-up napkin at Colby, who batted it away with a laugh.

“So whose turn is it?” Megan asked.

“Charlie hasn’t given us any lurid tales of nerd love.” David pointed out. Charlie was curled up against Colby’s side on the couch and was already a beer ahead of Don and at least two ahead of everyone else.

“Male or female?” Charlie asked brazenly.

“Chicks, please.” David said.

Don put his hands over his ears. “I don’t want to know,” he whined, to the amusement of the team.

“Rachael Wise.” Charlie said softly as if thinking about something else.

Don’s hands dropped from his ears. “What?!”

Charlie smirked.

“Did you say Rachael Wise, as in my high school girlfriend Rachael Wise?”

Charlie shrugged. “Maybe.”

Everyone laughed. Don put his face in his hands.

“Well, you two were broken up, it was after graduation, she came by looking for you, one thing led to another.” Don’s hands had gone back to his ears.

“What she hot?” David asked.

“Co-captain of the cheerleading team.” Charlie said.

“Awesome.” David replied in guy solidarity.

“Just tell me it was in your room.” Don moaned feeling a little disturbed, though some part of his brain was trying to tell him that something more was wrong with Charlie’s story.

Charlie shrugged. “Well, we never really got as far as my room. Your room, on the other hand...”

Don groaned.

Megan laughed. “This is the kind of stuff you need to be worried about me analyzing.”

Everyone but Don laughed.

“So first guy?” Megan asked.

Charlie gave a melodramatic sigh and fanned himself. “Martin Smith, fellow prodigy, electrical engineering major, tall, blond, Mormon.”

“Mormon!” Colby exclaimed.

“Mormon, he’s got like twenty kids now. Do you know what it takes to get one of them out of their magic underwear?”

Don’s head shot up as a couple of synapses connected in the beer soup of his brain. “Wait a second! Rachael and I broke up right before prom.”

“Yeah.” Charlie said sounding a little annoyed at his story of Martin’s magic underwear getting interrupted.

“And you went to Princeton that September.”


“You were thirteen, Charlie!”

Charlie shrugged. “Yeah.”

Don was so in shock he couldn’t even speak for a moment. “It was illegal!” he finally sputtered out “Did you even know what was going on?”

“Well I like to think I caught on pretty quick when she started doing that thing with her tongue.” Charlie answered a slight edge to his voice.

Don blinked at his brother so casually curled up against Colby, beer held lightly between his fingers. Over the last year Charlie had shed the last of the awkward, boyish act and morphed into a confident adult with an easy sexual aura that turned heads. Even like this, he didn’t look small against Colby; rather Colby looked like an exotic pet to lounge against.

“I need another beer.” Don said and got up to wobble to the kitchen.


Don was staring at the fridge, not doing anything, when Megan entered the kitchen.

“Hey, Don, you okay? You’ve been here a while.”

“Yep. I’m great. My high school sweetheart’s a pedophile, my brother’s a victim, and it was on my sheets. Life is spiffy.”

Megan rubbed circles on Don’s back. “Hey, don’t beat yourself up. Any problems Charlie may have resulting from that incident I’m sure he’s dealing with in therapy, and even if the statute of limitations weren’t expired, it would be her word against Charlie’s and I really doubt Charlie would want to drag himself and the family though that.”

“I know, it’s just… Fuck!” Don exclaimed and pounded his fist onto the counter.

“I know.” Megan said softly.

“I always thought I was protecting Charlie and I find out everyday just how miserably I failed at it.”

“Don, if you had truly failed with Charlie he wouldn’t be sitting in the other room, confident, successful, with someone who loves him.”

Don nodded his head. “Yeah.” He grabbed a beer from the fridge and headed back to the lounge.

When he got back to the lounge Charlie was explaining something using a beer bottle and an empty take out box as a prop. Judging by how much David and Colby were laughing he had a feeling it wasn’t a math theorem Charlie was trying to explain.

“Hey, guys, what did I miss?” Before Don could be caught up David’s phone beeped. He quickly looked at it and, though it was a little hard to tell, a bit of extra color rose in his cheeks.

“Ah...I’m gonna call it a night.”

The rest of the crew snickered.

“Well, you have fun with the rest of your night.” Colby teased as David tried to keep a straight face.

“Actually I’m going to head out, too.” Megan said. “I’m supposed to meet Larry at the observatory.”

“Say hi for me.” Charlie said.

Megan and David grabbed their coats and said their goodbyes.

“You heading to bed, Chuck?” Don asked.

“Yeah, going to call it a night. You?”

Don shook his head. “Nah. I’m still feeling a little wired. I’m going to watch TV for a bit.”

Charlie frowned for a moment and Don put on a smile.

“Okay. Try to get some sleep tonight.”

“I’ll be fine.”


“Goodnight, Don.” Colby said.

Don watched as they climbed the stairs and disappeared.


Charlie snuggled up against Colby, the warmth of his body relaxing already loose limbs. He gently kissed Colby’s chest and looked up for a kiss on the lips. Colby’s face was far away and pensive.

“Hey, what are you thinking?” Charlie asked with a little nudge.

Colby’s forehead creased in thought. “Charlie, what Don said tonight...”

Charlie stiffened. “What about it?”

“Were you…were you really thirteen?”

“Yes.” Charlie said evenly, unsure where the conversation was heading.

“How old was she?”

“Eighteen, nearly nineteen. She was a little older than Don.”

“Charlie?” Colby whispered his name, voice full of second-hand pain. Charlie pulled back a bit so he could look at Colby.

“It didn’t have anything to do with me. She was trying to hurt Don. Three years together and it ended badly just before prom.”

“Did you know?”

“More or less.”

“Then why..?” Colby suddenly looked hard at Charlie. “Did you say no?”

‘Come on Charlie, aren’t you curious?’

“I don’t remember.”

“How can you not remember?”

“It was a long time ago.”

‘Just lay still.’

‘Wait, Rachael…’


“You must remember.”

“Only bits. It’s a strange memory. Like watching a movie with frames missing.”

‘Don’t you want to be just like your big brother?’

“Did you say stop?”

‘No, Rachael. Stop.’

“It’s unlikely.”

‘You don’t really want me to stop.’


Charlie looked the man he loved dead in the eye and lied.

“I don’t remember. She wanted me to tell Don, to piss him off. I never did and I don’t even know why I let her name slip out tonight. It must have been the beer. It had nothing to do with me.”

‘Charlie, Charlie. Always the shadow, always telling your brother the things you see. Are you going to tell him what you just did, little Charlie?’


‘We’ll see.’

Colby wrapped his arms around Charlie and drew him close. Charlie let out a long breath and ordered his body to relax. He closed his eyes and told himself that everything was fine.


Charlie cracked open his eyes and looked at the clock. 3 am. The math hour. He could feel the numbers spark across his mind. Sometimes they were unformed and he slid back into sleep. Other times…

‘Of course!

Charlie slipped out of bed wrapping his bathrobe around him and headed down to the garage.

He paused as he walked past the living room. The TV was still on. Figuring Don had probably fallen asleep on the couch, Charlie tiptoed into the room and reached over to turn off the television. Don had been sitting so still Charlie assumed he must be asleep. He quickly glanced over his shoulder. Don’s eyes were open but not blinking.

“Don?” Charlie said softly.

Don blinked once. “Yes?” Don answered flatly. Charlie looked to his brother’s lap. A gun sat there and Don’s hands were gently curled around it. Charlie felt his heart stop, like liquid nitrogen had been pumped into his veins. He slowly approached Don and knelt down in front of him.

“Don. What are you doing?”

“Thinking.” Don answered flatly, still staring straight ahead.

“With your gun out?” Don flicked his eyes down for a second as if to confirm the gun was still there. He shrugged. “Don, why do you have your gun out?”

Don gave a chuckle. “Cognitive emergence.”


“What does it take for a brain to make all these thoughts, that’s what you’re always thinking, what does it take to stop all these thoughts. To just have quiet. There has to be a balance right? Equations have to be balanced. That’s what you’re always saying.” Don slowly lifted the gun and looked at it. “Just a thing, a tool.” Don whispered, voice heavy with exhaustion.

Charlie found his limbs frozen as Don leaned his cheek against the barrel, in a quick move the end of the barrel was pressing into the skin of Don’s temple then just as quickly it was leaving a mark in the soft skin of his lips then under his chin. “What does it take, Charlie? How do you turn it all off? What’s the other half of the equation?” Don’s voice became cracked and raw.

“Don, give me the gun.” Charlie said evenly, despite the almost deafening pounding of his heart. Don gave a chuckle and let go of the gun so it was only dangling from one finger.

Charlie snatched the gun from Don, flicked on the safety, ejected the clip and pulled the slide back to retrieve the bullet from the chamber. Don raised an eyebrow.

“I might not be able to shoot one of these but I sure as hell can unload one.” Charlie quickly dropped all three bits into the pocket of his bathrobe. If he could have dismantled the whole thing he would have. He could feel the fabric strain against the unusual weight.

Charlie carefully took Don’s hands in his. “Do you do this a lot, Don? Think about balancing the equation?”

Don shrugged. “Sometimes, it’s worse in winter.”


“The sheets are cold, the nights are longer, the only thing in my fridge is fossilized mu shu pork and the milk looks more like cheese. I’ve got five bucks in my retirement account and I can feel my elbow start to hurt where I screwed it up pitching when I was twenty…” Don trailed off then suddenly looked at Charlie. “I’m so sorry, Charlie, I’m so sorry for what she did to you, I’ll bust her, I’ll kill her, it never should have happened, you never should have been there, I…”

Charlie shook his head and gently squeezed Don’s hands. “Okay. Don, listen to me. What happened with Rachael was a long time ago and my patterns of response to situations were already firmly established.” Don gave Charlie a questioning look. Charlie took a breath. “I was already broken, it did me no damage, it meant nothing, just a moment in time like any other and it only has the meaning I give it and I give it none and I now have a boyfriend, and a shrink, and a doctor, and a bottle of little pills I take every other day to help me, and what is wrong with me is getting better all the time, okay?”

“You’re taking drugs?”

Charlie nodded slowly. “Yes, Don.”

“You swore you’d never do that.”

“And I also swore I’d never see a shrink. Things change, people change. Do you get what I’m saying?” Don nodded. “Good. Also, you have more than five dollars in your retirement fund. I started a fund in your name when you moved back from Albuquerque. I know you took a demotion, I also know you took a pay cut. Most of it’s in money market, some property development but there’s also a good chunk of cash just collecting interest every month.”

“What? How?”

“I’m practically a line item in the federal budget these days. I am rich and you are my brother and I love you very much and you are not going to die cold and alone in the old agents’ home as long as I have anything to say about it. Okay?”

Don nodded again.

“Good. Okay.” Charlie let go of Don’s hands and put them gently on Don’s head. Don closed his eyes and lowered his head under Charlie’s soft touch. “Don, I need you to do something now. I need you to promise me you will not harm yourself.”


“No. No debate here. I need you to promise. I need you to swear by god, and mom, and the math you will make no attempt to harm yourself, no attempt to kill yourself, no driving too fast, no putting yourself in the line of fire. Nothing. Promise me this, Don. As my brother.” Charlie knew he was pleading but he also knew Don, knew Don didn’t break promises. “Please.”

Don took a deep breath. “I promise.”

Charlie slipped his hands from Don’s hair to Don’s face and tilted his head up. “Open your eyes. Look at me and promise.”

“I promise. I swear.” Don said softly. Charlie let out a breath. A strange smile quirked at Don’s lips for a moment. “Besides it’s against the rules isn’t it?” Charlie couldn’t help a half panicked chuckle.

“Don, if I thought you needed to be bound to all the Rules of the Arrangement, this would be a much longer and weirder conversation.” Don chuckled. “Okay, here’s what you’re going to do.”

“Giving orders, Chuck?”

“Yes. You are going to go upstairs, get undressed, get into bed and go to sleep. In the morning you will get up, take a shower, put on your spare, clean suit, come downstairs, eat breakfast then look me in the eye. Depending on how much dark I see will dictate if you get your gun back.”

“Charlie…” Don began to object.

“No. My turf. These are my rules. When you go to work the first thing you will do is call Bradford and make an appointment for today. You will go down, you will tell him everything and we’ll go from there.

“He’ll take away my field status.”

‘Good!’ Charlie wanted to shout.

“No he won’t. They only do that if you’re a danger to yourself or others and you are neither because you have promised.”


“Good. Now, repeat back. What are you going to do?”

Don sighed. “Go upstairs, bed, sleep, wake up, shower, clothes, breakfast, look at you, work, Bradford.”

“Good. And if you don’t go I will have Colby drag you down in your own cuffs.”

“I’m his boss.”

“I’m his lover.”


Charlie stood and pulled Don to his feet with him. He felt the gun bounce against his leg.

Don made his way slowly up the stairs and Charlie followed. Don stopped at the door to his old room, long ago redone into a guest room, all signs of the crime that happened there long since washed away.

Charlie reached out and opened the door, motioning Don through it.

Don moved like a man asleep, striping off his clothes, letting them fall where they may. He climbed into the neatly made bed and shivered. “The sheets are cold.”

Charlie sat gently on the edge of the bed.

“I’ll stay until they warm up. Now sleep.”

Don nodded and closed his eyes. Charlie gently reached out and placed a hand on his brother’s head and left it there until he was sure Don was asleep.


Colby cracked his eyes open as Charlie entered the room. The clock said quarter to four.

“That was quick.” Colby mumbled, since he was rather used to Charlie staying awake at his boards until dawn. Charlie didn’t answer, only sat down heavily on the bed that wasn’t really made for two. There was a heavy clunk on the bedside table. Colby sat up quickly.

“Uh…Charlie, where did you get that gun?”

“It’s Don’s,” he answered flatly.

“Why do you have Don’s gun?”

“So he won’t use it.” Colby watched as Charlie began to shake. He quickly shifted so he could wrap his arms around Charlie, just in time. The heaving sobs came in waves like an ocean storm. Colby desperately wanted answers, but all he could do was watch Charlie cough and choke around the tears. He rocked Charlie whispering soft, soothing nothings. When the worst seemed to have passed Charlie looked up at him.

“Why?” he choked out. “I don’t understand. How could he? He pressed it to his lips right there in front of me. How could he?”

Colby didn’t know if he wanted to run to check on Don or shoot the man himself.

“Where’s Don now?”

“Asleep, next door.”

“Are you sure?”

Charlie nodded. “I stayed until he was asleep and he always forgets that the board outside his door squeaks so I’ll be able to hear if he tries to leave.”

Colby nodded. Charlie must have been in highly sensible mode when he put Don to bed.

“What did he say?”

“He wanted me to balance the equation, to make the thoughts in his head be quiet. He sounded so tired.” Colby winced inside. He knew about the Long Nights where you couldn’t make your own dark thoughts shut up long enough to let you sleep and one of your own bullets seemed like a perfectly reasonable sleeping pill. “Colby, have you ever…I mean..?”

“A few times, mainly in Afghanistan. That high up in the mountains the sun goes down quickly, the nights are dark.”

“But not since. I mean the FBI…” Colby sighed and tried to figure out how to explain that sooner or later every agent, every cop has a bad night where they get a little curious about what gun oil tastes like.

“We all have bad nights, Charlie. That’s why they screen as heavily as the do. Try to weed out the ones who can’t take it before they can’t take it.”

“But Don…”

“Don’s in a different situation from me. I’m a grunt. I rank somewhere between the janitors and the drug dogs. Don…Don’s the boss, and a good boss with a major reputation and a serious track record in the Bureau. If something goes wrong he’s the one who catches the shit and unlike damn near every other boss on the planet his shit doesn’t roll down hill. He doesn’t take it out on us, most of the time we don’t even hear about it and he’s got that same damn obsessive streak you do. It’s got to be done right, and if it’s hard or messy he does it himself. That’s going to wear someone down faster than normal.”

“But it’s Don.” Charlie said as if it should explain everything and in Charlie’s mind it probably did. Don was constant as 2+2.

“Charlie, you of all people should get where Don is. You live on that cliff; you’ve spent most of your life hanging over that abyss trying to get a better look.”

“But I’m broken.” Charlie said as if it were the simplest statement of fact. Colby held Charlie close.

“Oh, love, it’s the 21st century. We’re all broken, you just beat the rush.”

Charlie pulled away from Colby and put his head in his hands. “I made him promise. Made him look me in the eyes and promise.”

“That’s good. Don keeps his word.”

Charlie reached over and took the gun off the nightstand. In the dark it looked grotesque in Charlie’s hands. He flipped it around a few times and before Colby could say a word Charlie leaned over and wrapped his lips around the barrel. Colby’s heart stopped, he couldn’t breathe, his brain tried desperately to wake up from what had to be a nightmare. Charlie pulled his lips away and made a face.

“Yuck. Gun oil.”

Colby snatched the gun from Charlie’s hand.

“Don’t you ever, ever do that again! That was the worst thing I have ever seen!”

“I’m sorry. I just…I had to know.”

“Well now you know and don’t ever do that again!”


Colby double checked that the gun was in fact unloaded and took a few deep breaths. “Charlie, why don’t you get some sleep?”

“I can’t. I have to listen, in case…”

“Don’ll keep his word. You sleep. I’ll keep watch.”

Charlie nodded. “Okay.”

‘Oh, Don, you better keep your word.’




mikes_grrl on November 20th, 2008 09:19 pm (UTC)
oh wow oh wow oh wow!

Loved this beginning, the humor and camaraderie of the team and the family almost protecting them all from the darkness, but it's all a mirage. That Don's own neuroses are already present is obvious, but I love how you triggered this particular crisis by the story of Charlie's rape. Don is obviously shredded, and since this is 114k long, I know this is just the beginning of his journey.

*settles in happily*

ladygray99ladygray99 on November 20th, 2008 09:21 pm (UTC)
And the winner of first feed back goes to...YOU. \o/ Hold on. I don't think this will actually be as depressing as people thing. it's just going to have some twists and turns.
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Rat Creature: yay!ratcreature on November 20th, 2008 09:27 pm (UTC)
Yay! I'm looking forward to this.
ladygray99ladygray99 on November 20th, 2008 09:29 pm (UTC)
I'm glad. I hope it lives up to the hype.
fredbassett: Don - Nicefredbassett on November 20th, 2008 09:31 pm (UTC)
Oh. My. God. This is what I've missed in this fandom! Just when I wasn't reading too much Numb3rs fic any more, this comes along and I remember exactly whay I loved this show, and the fic, so much! And there's 119,000 words of it? Fantastic. Bloody fantastic.

I'll be pouncing on every single chapter as it comes along.

“I’m his boss.”

“I’m his lover.”


Some lovely moments of humour interspersed in the dark nature of this. I adored it. All of it!
ladygray99ladygray99 on November 20th, 2008 09:33 pm (UTC)
Well now you have a month and a bit of it coming down the pipe at you. I hope you enjoy it.
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wickhouse2005wickhouse2005 on November 20th, 2008 09:38 pm (UTC)
This is so true and I think it has always not matter the time been true....“Oh, love, it’s the 21st century. We’re all broken, you just beat the rush.”...

Some people are just able to hide their brokeness better and some might not even realize that they are broken, but life is hard and yeah we break.

Can't wait to see how Don is put back togather.

ladygray99ladygray99 on November 20th, 2008 09:40 pm (UTC)
With lots of glue and little bits of string.
twins_m0m on November 20th, 2008 09:48 pm (UTC)
This was just what I'd hoped from you. Full of depth, pain, and also hope, all rolled into one delicious story. Since this is just the beginning, I can tell I'm going to really love this series. You really should find a publisher. Your writing is just as good (or in some cases better) as any novel I've bought to read.
ladygray99ladygray99 on November 20th, 2008 09:51 pm (UTC)
Thank you. Now that this is done I'm going to focus on an original TV script to try to sell to LA.
clairelesley on November 20th, 2008 10:45 pm (UTC)
Absolutely fantastic!
And that's coming from someone who is not a Charlie/Colby fan.
Just can't wait for more!
ladygray99ladygray99 on November 20th, 2008 11:08 pm (UTC)
Thank you. :)
indusnmindusnm on November 21st, 2008 02:37 am (UTC)
I really, really want to read this whole series, but I'm an avid Don whumper and not really a CHarlie whumper, so I have to ask before I go back--do you beat Charlie or Don up more in the first story? If it's a whole lot of Charlie and not so much Don, I may want to do it after this story is up so I can balance my whumping ;) Yes, I'm very, very weird.

Also, I kind of stopped watching the show after the finale last year because well-I work in civil rights and the way they handled that entire issue made me mad at Don (my favorite)- but now your fic has me wanting to start watch it all over again! Thanks for posting, awesome beginning!
ladygray99ladygray99 on November 21st, 2008 03:58 am (UTC)
The first two are mainly Charlie whumpage. I guess all you really need to know to read this one first is that Charlie's a major masochist 'cause it's the only way he's figured out to keep his head together and balance out the numbers. and in the second one charlie develops fashion sense then gets kidnapped and sliced up a bit by a wacko.

And I know exactly how you feel about the show. I almost didn't tune in this season that last ep was so crap. Its gotten back on its game though and Don is doing some serious character growth.
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ladygray99ladygray99 on November 21st, 2008 04:57 am (UTC)
good to know. I hope the rest of the story lives up to the hype. :)
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Devo79: dangerousdevo79 on November 21st, 2008 02:28 pm (UTC)
Uhhh it's here *jumps up and down*

It's like Christmas!
A really angsty Christmas but still...
ladygray99ladygray99 on November 21st, 2008 06:17 pm (UTC)
Don't worry the angst will shift into stress in a few chapters. :)
ninou1ninou1 on November 21st, 2008 09:09 pm (UTC)
Trust you to go straight to the heart of the matter, and I really love it, angst builts in a few lines, it's really good.

There are a lot of very great lines in those parapraghs
I love this one, "every cop has a bad night where they get a little curious about what gun oil tastes like.
It's difficult to explain why, because of my english, but it's good.

ladygray99ladygray99 on November 21st, 2008 09:32 pm (UTC)
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
batgurl10batgurl10 on November 22nd, 2008 12:50 am (UTC)
OMG!!!!! SWEET!!! been waiting for this for a loooong while. Do i start reading? or wait for a few chapts to post?
*bites fingers*
decisions! i cant handle this pressure, lady!

ladygray99ladygray99 on November 22nd, 2008 12:56 am (UTC)
read the first two today. get your dose of numb3rs on tv tonight and I'll post another part tomorrow morning my time.
boymommytotwo: colby charlie hazyboymommytotwo on November 22nd, 2008 03:55 am (UTC)
::omg i'm so excited::
i can't even click "Part 1"...

::running to reread::

::running to reread::

ladygray99ladygray99 on November 22nd, 2008 04:06 am (UTC)
Re: ::omg i'm so excited::
Deep breath. It's just fic. :-)
boymommytotwo: colby charlie hazyboymommytotwo on November 27th, 2008 02:26 am (UTC)
i _know_ it's 'just' fic... but still...
i can be excited, you know... ;)

“Good. And if you don’t go I’ll have Colby drag you down in your own cuffs.”
“I’m his boss.”
“I’m his lover.”

and the end? ::gulp::

wow... so glad to have some new whitman. thank you for posting again, friend.

ladygray99ladygray99 on November 27th, 2008 02:58 am (UTC)
Re: i _know_ it's 'just' fic... but still...
Well it makes it worth it when you and other read and comment.
foolartist02: charlie thinking bwfoolartist02 on December 17th, 2008 11:25 am (UTC)
What came after almost made me forget it but I had to comment on this: “Mormon, he’s got like twenty kids now. Do you know what it takes to get one of them out of their magic underwear?”

To most this would be funny, to anyone who really knows about sacred garments (the correct name for 'magic underwear') this is hilarious! Btw is it just that Cobly's from the area or what? I haven't read a lot of Numb3rs fanfic yet... but everything I have read so far has at least one mormon joke. Am I missing something?

And now back to the proper somber note of the end of this chapter...
ladygray99ladygray99 on December 17th, 2008 06:35 pm (UTC)
I don't know. In cannon Colby's from small town Idaho but its never been stated what religion he was raised in. I hate to say it but Mormons are just kinda easy to make jokes about plus I knew a bunch at university except they were all really bad Mormons. Alchohol, coffee, and one of them could cuss more than anyone I'd ever met. We'd threaten to tell the elders on her and she'd tell us to fuck off. Though I have to admit I got the magic underwear idea from a production of Angels in America. There's a very powerful scene in the second part where one of the characters gets undressed then strips off that last layer but the other character he's with, and most of the audience, doesn't appreciate what it means.
laura_trekkielaura_trekkie on January 15th, 2009 05:45 pm (UTC)
Team night was fun, though the revelation about Charlie and Don's ex was a little disturbing. Don's obviously taken it hard on top of everything else he deals with. I'm glad Charlie made him promise and that he told Colby, so there can be another set of eyes keeping a watch on Don at work (in case he 'accidentally' steps into the line of fire somewhere.) But, Don *is* strong. He wouldn't be where he is if that wasn't the case. I think it was just a shock and the case of things always looking worse at night. Hopefully Bradford will have some helpful advice.

ladygray99ladygray99 on January 15th, 2009 06:49 pm (UTC)
Don is strong but in a way that's his weakness. He thinks he can carry every burden and save the world with one hand tied behind his back and an bad that gets through is his fault. That can eat someone up.